Saturday, July 16, 2011

Is this poem any good?

I think it would sound better if you wrote "blood tears." but you'd need another word at the end of the next verse to rhyme with "tears." It would be nice if you could replace "giant" with another adjective that would create a better picture that has to do with liquids. Giant always brings out the image of something bulky. Overall, it has a pretty aggresive and resentful tone, which I guess is what you wanted... I think it's good

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